Robo-Teacher? No Thanks

Do you believe computers will be able to replace teachers some day? many people do believe so. "We live in a technological age, it is only a matter of time until machines will take over human jobs in every life domain" says professor Arik Daniel of the Technology Studies University of Tel-Aviv, "It is inevitable and honestly, mankind looks forward for the chance to enslave machines to pamper up the western world."

Unfortunately, I do believe computers will be able to replace teachers, if not already. I prefer human being as a teacher rather than a machine because no matter how advanced a computer may be and how well it can teach, it could never dialogue with students the way teachers do. Teachers show emotions and that is the difference between people and machines. If the only reason for students to go to school is to become smarter, than school shouldn't exist and the kids should learn by themselves. I believe school's main purpose is to develop morals and to teach the students how to stand for their principles and for their beliefs.

Moreover, if robots are to teach humans instead of teachers, we can only expect them to teach the way they are planned and nothing beyond that, meaning they will teach students to think like machines, the way they are programmed. Any society that will accept such a teaching program will condemn itself to become a cold hearted machine-like society, in which the citizens will concentrate on climbing up the socio-economic ladder regarding the option of hurting others while doing so.

To conclude, I think that replacing teachers with computers is the fulfillment of mankind's suicidal instinct and if we do so, the differences between us and machines will be erased. From now on, listening to me is up to you, but if you choose not to, don't say nobody warned you.

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Revolution of the Internet

The internet is an invention that has revolutionized our lives. It was created at the beginning of the century and speard world wide in no time. About ninty-nine percent of computers in the western world are already connected.

The internet is a fast and convinient way of communicating with each other. For example, you could send a message to a friend from your computer, using E-mail, and get a response in an instant. Also, you can access information published in websites, sometimes you're able to even edit the information. And if you are a teenager, you would probably enjoy playing video games through the internet.

On the other hand, the internet is sometimes a very dangerous place, especially for children. Kids often do not think before giving strangers they talk to on the internet details from their private lives, so it is easy for dangerous people to gather up enough details to locate people they meet on the internet. Moreover, young kids are frequently exposed to adult contents on the internet, and if they find it interesting they may implement what they see and try doing it themselves.

To conclude, I believe that the internet is a very positive and modern tool that eases our lives. but as much as I want my life to be easy, I rather my kids stay safe and away from dangerous people. Therefore, I suggest young kids use the internet only under adult supervision.

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Youngsters' license

A too widespreaded phenomenon is young drivers envolved in car accidents. It seems like every day a disaster occurs on the road, especially to people under the age of 18. Therefore, an organization of accident victims has recently proposed that the age for getting a driver's license should be raised to 19.

In my book, raising the age for getting a driver's license to 19 won't solve the problem. Recent studies show that only four percent of lethal car accidents are caused by youngsters. Raising the age for getting the driver's license will only keep them off the road but ninty-six percent of the lethal car accidents will still occur and the problem will live on. The problem won't be solved and teens will lose their opportunity to get their license.

Another way of dealing with this issue is by upgrading all cars to automatic level, meaning the cars will have some sort of an autopilot system that will make it easier for drivers to control and maneuver their vehicle. Using this technology will increase the chance of surviving serious accidents. The technology exists, but the will to use it is missing.

To conclude, I don't think that the age is the main factor for car accidents. After all, alchohol is at 90 percent the cause for accidents and it is more accessible as an adult than as a teen. Therefore I find no reason in punishing teenagers when adults' judgement is to be deficient.

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Friends

One of the most important things in the world, according to most of the people are their friends.
It is an instict of people to team up with and surrond themselves with the ones they like and have a common denominator, and most people try to find special qualities in those friends.

In my opinion, the most important quality in friends is being trust-worthy, because you can't always rely on your own skills and you need the assistance of another person. A few more qualities friends should have is being good listeners and helpful when needed because with no listening there can be no real connection with anyone. The only conversation that can exist in such terms is a one-side one.

Moreover, friends often critisize us and tell us that we are wrong when no one else will. With no friends we would keep doing those mistakes that we never notice ourselves. They back us up when we need them and support us when we have a hard time.

To conclude, I think friends are great for just being there. With no friends we would be a bunch of lonely and bitter sociopaths. Without them there would be no one to catch us when we fall and when it ever happens it is going to hurt. I honestly believe they make us happier and more positive about this world and the people living in it.

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My composition

An issue that concerns everyone, especially teenagers, is the fact that student's aren't involved enough in their communities. Surprisingly or not, a research shows that it mostly happens in highly developed cities and societies. It is also important to say that there are many people that think there is nothing wrong with it. I am not one of them and I'd like to suggest a few ways to deal with it.

For one thing, most students are in a phase of depression and confusion. They think they are alone and that adults will never understand them, therefore they want no connection with the people around them. In order to get to them and make them involved in the community it is necessary to make them trust adult people. That is possible by organizing courses that will teach teachers and parents how to gain students' respect. That will make the students more open-minded and they will be ready to open up to the community.

Another way of dealing (with) this issue is by using what students like to educate them to be involved in their communities(phr. - not clear what you mean). That can be done by having concerts, festivals, parades and more. It will prove (to) the students that the community has something to offer them and they will be interested in becoming a part of it.

To conclude, if adults offer studetns and teenagers some attraction(s) and show their understanding, the students will open up for new ideas such as(where is the rest???)


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An application for college

17 Hatzionut Street

Holon

April 29, 2010




Dean(מיותר)

Harvard university

19 Saints Street

New York





Dear Sir/Madam,



My name is Guy Shiran, I'm an eighteen year-old student in Kugel High School, Holon and I would like to apply for admission to your school. I've always been interested in going to Harvard and now the time has come. I would like to apply for the biochemistry course. I think you'll be impressed by my grades average, and I don't see a reason for me not to be accepted(phr. - this is not suitable).



I would like to study in Harvard because of it's reputation. Most of Harvard graduates are famous researchers and Nobel Prize achievers.


This is a very good opening. It's too bad you couldn't find the time to complete your work.

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USA is calling

12 Homeless Street
Holon
April, 1, 2010

Manager
"See The World" Travel Agency
66 Shlomo Street
New York



Dear Sir/Madam,



I am a 17 year old student, and I'd like to go on an organized tour to the United States. I deeply enjoy traveling and traveled around the world many times over the years. I read your advertisement and I would like to get some information about the tour.

I want to go on a tour that would interest me and would interest other teenagers. It has to be fun and modern, like visiting a The Millitary Museum in Washington DC, some malls, resteraunts and more. It would make me happy if you send me the information about tours that include the things I mentioned, and about the guiding staff you probably have, that can guide us in the USA and about security.

Also, I would like to know how much a tour like that should cost if I choose traveling with your agency and then I'll decide if it is worth it or not, and would very appreciate it if you gave me some information about the weather in the USA and recommanded what kind of clothes I should bring for this trip.

Please reply as soon as possible, I'm looking forward to go on this tour and don't want to miss this chance.

Truly yours,
Hom Less.

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