I would like to talk about my twin sister, Reut. As I said Reut is my twin sister, she is 15 years old and she was born one minute after me. Reut and I also have a brother named Roey. Reut is a kind person that would help anyone and would want nothing back.
Reut is interested in a youth movement that is called HaNoar HaOved VeHaLomed and she is a counselor in that youth movement.
Reut and I were born in
I am very glad that I have a sister like Reut that cares about me so much. I would never want to replace her and I will do anything that I can to make her happy.- This is a good ending.
Gur, You write well, but always too short. Don't be afraid to give a deeper analysis of your sister. You haven't written anything about her personality and nearly anything about her interests. The reader does not get a good idea about your sister accoring to this essay.
Daphna.
I know and I'm really trying to make it a bit longer, so I'll try harder.

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