I want my money back

22 Hatzionut street
Holon
December 8, 2009


Ms. Gilat Saimon
Principal
Kugel High School
1 Moti Gur Street
Holon

Dear Madam,

This year, as it is already a custom, 11th graders from almost every Israeli high school, including yours, have been given the opportunity to join a group of israeli students and teachers going on a trip to Poland. This trip is very significant to Israelis and Jews, in general, and probably most of the students want to take a part in this important journey to concentration camps in Poland. However, I believe the price of the trip is too high and thus many students can't afford to go on the trip, in spite of its importance, and that is just why I'm writing you this letter

First of all, I realize that your school gives scholarships to students that need it, but most of the students need it, so even if you give a few students scholarships, it's not going to be enough for the rest of them. Because of economic problems about 80% of the 11th graders won't be able to afford buying(מיותר) the tickets and won't go to(ww. - on) this unimaginably important trip.If they don't experience this trip now who knows when they're going to have a second chance to do this.

I know that, as a principal, you're(you are) under a lot of pressure, but this is urgent, and if we work hard and fast enough we will be able to solve this problem easily. The students and I have no time to waste, the trip is in a few months and we don't want to miss it. it's a once in a life opportunity, and it's a shame that students can't go just because they can't afford it.

To conclude, students should go to Poland without being worried about its price, but since money is always a problem, I suggest either to reach an agreement with the airline company, and make the tickets cheaper(phr. - and lower/reduce the prices), or give scholarships to more students.

I look forward to a promt reply.

Yours truly,
Guy Shiran

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